- Downtown will be more than 'just a place for rich people' verb: will be noun: downtown/'rich people' why it's a good example: It doesn't have any unnecessay nouns/verbs and catches your eye and isn't boring. The nouns are good.
- Changes afoot for 'ghost workers' verb: afoot noun: changes/'ghost workers' why it's a good example: It doesn't have any unnecessary words and catches your eye, and the wording is not boring. Both the verb and the noun are good.
- When success breeds failure verb: breeds noun: success why it's a good example: it doesn't have any unnecessary words and sounds interesting, which makes you want to read it. The sentence structure in interesting and grabs your attention. The verb/noun are good.
- There's a war on - anyone care? verb: on/care noun: war/anyone why it's a good example: this headline is connecting with the audience by making a personal approach. There are no unnecessary words and the headline sounds interesting, which makes you want to read on. It gets straight to the point and is short and simple.
- Bats bidding Austin farewell verb: bidding noun: bats/Austin why it's a good example: The verb/noun is good and there are no unnecessary words: it's short, simple, and gets straight to the point. It's interesting to read b/c the Bats have played in Austin for a while, and now they're going, so that's news. The headline grabs your attention.
- Recognize racing for the cruelty it is verb: recognize noun: racing why it's a good example: It's an interesting headline and there are no unnecessary words. The headline is active. It makes you want to read the story and grabs your attention.
Headline 6 rewritten: Racing isn't all it's up for
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